r/BetaReaders • • 14m ago

Novella [In progress] [25k] [Fantasy] The Tide Between Worlds

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Hi everyone! I'm looking for a few beta readers for Part One of my adult epic fantasy, The Tide Between Worlds.

Blurb:
The Great Throat has never stopped falling. Then, one afternoon, it does.

Seventeen minutes later, the water returns, a young man is dead, and the official report is already a lie.

Harbour marshal Aven Tarow only wanted to go home to his pregnant wife. Instead he's sailing into the Upper Waters with a liar for a captain, chasing the people who are stealing the sea.

Feedback I’m looking for:
- Was there anywhere you got bored or started skimming?

- Does the world make sense without feeling like an info dump?

- Are the technical bits easy enough to follow?

- Would you keep reading after chapter 6?

If you are interested, DM me or comment and I'll send the link.


r/BetaReaders • • 39m ago

70k [In progress] [70k] [Dark Romance/Paranormal Romance] Night of Revelation

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Humans were on the cusp of developing superintelligent machines and rockets to carry them to the stars. When, they revealed themselves...

The vampires, hidden rulers of the earth, emerged from their secret lairs. They smashed the computers, broke the rockets, and now all humans live under their rule: split into two, those who breed more eventual blood and those they take for themselves.

Alfred and Catherine are two humans in love, planning soon to breed. Yet the powerful Lady Fazira, vampire ruler of Ireland feels special affection towards Catherine and may claim her as her own. Catherine herself becomes torn between Alfred's mortal love, the chance of giving life, and a single rapturous night in Lady Fazira's castle.


r/BetaReaders • • 3h ago

Novella [Complete] [21k] [Paranormal Romance] The Witch and Her Devils

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I’m working on editing for my first spicy novella. It’s 12 chapters and my first foray into writing spicy rather than steamy scenes. It’s about a witch and the two devils she summons during a Beltane ritual. It’s MMF. The triggers that I can think of are poly relationships, death, murder, grief, revenge, double penetration, and witchcraft. I can do a critique swap for any genre, though fantasy is my favorite, keeping it under 40k words. I have a lot on my plate right now so I can’t do much more. Please comment or message me if you’re interested!
Also, I will NOT be paying for your service so please don’t solicit me


r/BetaReaders • • 4h ago

40k [Complete] [45k] [Biopunk horror, satire] The Tower

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Hello, hoping to find a couple of readers who enjoy eco-horror, evil building trope, morally ambiguous characters, dark/absurd humour and tragedy.

CW for depression, addiction, body horror, deaths, there's a bit of sex but no actual spice, there's a lot of swearing and a bit of violence. It's got a lot of gallows humour in it as well. It's definitely not for the faint-hearted.

Attempt at a blurb (possibly contains slight spoilers):

Joe was once a promising surgeon living on the bright upper floors but life in the decaying organism known as the Tower has pushed him into addiction and despair. He does what he can to help the sick children of the dark and toxic lower levels, known as The Guts, where life is cheap and rebellion is brewing. Joe's ex, Cal, is a high-ranking scientist whose job it is to find solutions to enable the workmen to repair and patch up the building's ulcers and failing systems. Cal is disgusted by Joe's deterioration and doesn't understand this bleeding-heart liberal need of his to help the undeserving poor but for various reasons is unable to just turn away and move on. Meanwhile, Joe's partner Lee, a militant trade unionist from The Guts, fights to keep Joe alive and to mobilise his community against the upper-floor elite that is the main cause of the Tower's slow death. As the Tower consumes human life indiscriminately and Cal and Lee struggle to find a solution from their very different points of view, Joe is drawn back in to try and save humanity from looming ecological collapse and disaster.

This story gets pretty visceral in places so if you're squeamish it might not appeal. I'm very flexible regarding timeline - if you can manage it within three months that'd be great but no problem if you need longer. I would love to do a swap - adult fiction only though and I prefer it written in past tense (1st or 3rd is fine). I can send you the first chapter to let you decide before making any big time commitment. Also happy to do part swaps e.g. if you've only time to read half or a quarter of it.

Feedback I'm looking for is mainly... whether the prose is any good and if the story draws you in and keeps you wanting to read, if the science/mechanics of the story make sense (biologists would be especially welcome as readers!), if the characters are believable and if you feel invested in their story even though they're not entirely likeable, if Joe is relatable and not annoying, if the humour is actually funny despite being horrible, if it's a good read overall. I've been working on this for a couple of years and friends of mine have said they love it but I really want a stranger's eyes on it who doesn't feel obliged to be kind!

Absolutely no AI please.


r/BetaReaders • • 4h ago

>100k [In Progress] [102,300] [Genre] Adult fantasy, Romance. Fae fantasy with slow burn romance.

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Hi everyone, I'm hoping to get some beta readers for my manuscript.

It follows Aristo. A blind fae is put into a trial under an agreement to protect a woman and get something in return. These are the first couple of lines:

There’s no rain here, no drumbeat of a storm or howling winds. No neighbours fighting or banging doors, rushing to get to work. It’s only quiet here, from sunrise to sunset. I hate how quiet it is. 
At first I loved the peace, that my mother’s clattering pans didn’t disturb my thoughts, or my brother crashing into my room, annoying the fuck out of me with his chatter. Then it became awful. Noise guides me. I can find things through noise. Here, I’m always lost. I wander halls and corridors in circles until I catch a whisper or a familiar smell. 
That’s another thing this place lacks. Scent. Anathal Castle smells of nothing. Not stone. Not food. Not magic. It’s just an empty place full of stuff.
Stuff I can’t see.

I'm only looking for the first few chapters to be read; it is complete, but it is going through an editing process, and I'm looking for an outside perspective. If this is something that would interest you, I'd be truly grateful. I am able to read through your first few chapters as well if you would like.

I do not have a particular timeline, but as it is only a couple of chapters, I would hope to receive the feedback in a week or two.

Possible triggers: violence, misogyny, explicit scenes that include MM.


r/BetaReaders • • 19h ago

60k [Complete] [64k] [Sci-Fi] Soul Star

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Hi all,

First time poster and first time requesting a read.

Soul Star is about a grieving fifteen-year-old in the burning 1978 Bronx who teams up with a talking squirrel carrying a soldier’s soul from the future to stop an alien fire, and prove that destiny doesn’t decide who he becomes.

I wrote screenplays before and now taking a stab at a novel, naturally this story was one of my scripts.

Feedback: Does the story flow naturally? What confuses you? Do I get too wordy or "prose-y?" And any general feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Happy to swap! Happy to do a test run of a prologue and/or first chapter to see if it's something you would like to read.

Feel free to DM! Thanks!


r/BetaReaders • • 21h ago

>100k [In Progress] [140k] [Dark Gothic Romantasy] The Lies We Worship

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Hi all!

Author here looking for alpha readers for my novel The Lies We Worship.

THE LIES WE WORSHIP is a dark gothic romantasy about forbidden love, stolen divinity, and the terrible cost of uncovering the truth.

Back of book excerpt

The dead are restless. The heavens are silent. And the Church is lying.

When Thalia’s life becomes entangled with forces she was never meant to understand, she finds herself caught between a faith built on secrets and a mysterious man whose devotion may be as dangerous as the truths he refuses to tell.

As the boundary between life and death begins to fracture, Thalia must decide who to trust before everything she believes in comes undone.

Feedback

Looking primarily for first impressions, questions, comments, concerns. This is a first read out to
the public after my trusted circle. I’m looking to gain a small circle of readers to help with feedback before heading towards publishing!

PDF or Google Doc copies available in chapter chunks.

Please be responsive, genuine, and a little kind. This is near and dear to my heart and my first time pursuing public opinion on my writing.

xoxo, Scarlett


r/BetaReaders • • 21h ago

>100k [Complete] [105K] [Medieval/coming of age fanasty] Glass weavers

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Hello everyone! It's a medieval-coming of age fantasy written as a stand alone with the potential for a sequel. It is fairly straightforward as this was to be easy to digest for a first book debut.

The blurb/premise

Vixen an apprentice weaver moved to the town of Feathersong with her adoptive father, in the hopes of eventually succeeding her father's talents. But she is quickly set on a new path when she accidentally starts uncovering the secrets that lay beneath the sweet village facade.

After a chance encounter with a man suspected to be apart of a cult Vixen quickly has to decide who to trust, and who must be protected. With the other apprentices of Feathersong they discover a dangerous magic in the kingdom, one that could save them or put them all in grave danger.

With the shadows tormenting her at every corner, Vixen has to overcome her fears and discover what is lurking beneath the surface of the village, before it comes to get her, or for the people she cares about most.

In depth summary (mild spoilers)

Vixen moved to Feathersong with her adoptive father Wolf, due to a request from the head priest Eliza who sought Wolf's skills. Upon arriving and meeting the other weavers apprentices Unbrine, Dante, and Thorn, Vixen is thrown into a world she was not prepared for.

After she is attacked by a strange man she is left reeling wondering why, along with some strange new powers. Thanks to Unbrine and Dante they discover that a mysterious cult has been operating in Feathersong, desperate for answers Vixen sets out to discover more.

She is terrified that she will be attacked again, or worse her father whom she loves more then anything. And in doing so, she and the other apprentices uncover a dangerous magic, one that was better left to rot. Vixen has to keep a dark secret from everyone she loves and learn to protect them from a distance before she makes a grave mistake that could cost everyone.

Feedback:

I would love advice on characters, pacing, plot structure, prose and world building! Any and all feedback is welcome, absolutely no ai tools please. This is my first full attempt at a book with the intention of publishing it, it is a simple story to be easy to digest.

Thanks for taking the time to read! Feel free to dm or comment!


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

80k [Complete] [89,000] [Memoir] Serrated Love: A Story About OCD

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Hi all. I'm a first-time author self-publishing a memoir called Serrated Love. It follows a relationship from its early days through a spiral of anxiety into an OCD episode, a psychiatric admission, and recovery. The tone is honest, with some dark humour.

Looking for: 3 to 5 readers who'll read the full manuscript over 4 to 6 weeks and answer a short set of questions (where it dragged, where it confused, which scenes landed, how the ending felt). I'm not looking for line edits or typo hunting.

Content warning: graphic and detailed distressing thoughts involving harm to others, suicidal ideation, a psych ward stay, and explicit sexual content in multiple scenes. Please only volunteer if you're comfortable with that. You're free to stop reading whenever you like.

Format: PDF / Google Doc (will send via DM). Deadline: November 30, 2026.

Happy to swap: I'll read a chapter or a short piece of yours in return if you'd like.

If you're interested, comment or message me and I'll send a short sign-up form. Thank you!


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

80k [In Progress] [88K] [Portal Fantasy Romance] Through the Barren Moongate

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Hello fellow readers/writers!

Hoping to find a beta reader who loves fantasy, and also gives good constructive feedback. Looking for general likability, but also notes on flow and plot issues.

Up for a trade, but would like to start just trading the first 3 chapters to see if we are a good match.

Back of book blurb:

Cassidy is an unattached woman doing her best to move through life the only way she really knows how, by instinct and impulse.

Swiping right and casual dates take a sharp turn when she agrees to a weekend trip and is thrust into a world that shouldn’t exist, rebuilt from the ashes after a virus has left its women unable to reproduce. A world held together by controlled magic and a fragile balance, reliant on a full moon to open a gate between their world and hers.

As the next full moon draws near, something in Cassidy begins to stir, the magic settling in her blood pulling at her thoughts, her memories, and the thin thread still binding her to home. Her only ally in this place is her designated match Caelric, who has spent his life choosing isolation and quiet rebellion.

Now Cassidy must navigate a society that wants to claim her, a man who refuses to cage her, and a moon that seems to be waiting for her decision. Stay and fall into a world that will reshape her, or fight her way back and risk the consequences not just for herself, but for an entire civilization that may not survive without sacrifice.

TRIGGERS: Violence, Abduction/kidnapping, murder, trafficking, Infertility

If you are interested please send me a DM!


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

90k [Complete] [93k] [Dark Fantasy] A ballad of broken wings

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Hello!
I’m in search of a few beta readers, probably 2-3.

The blurb is:
“Maevis is a young woman born into slavery on a continent ruled by the Fae. She is the court songstress and spends her nights warming the bed of the crown prince, with whom she has a complicated relationship. As her friend and fellow slave, Rion, finds himself drawn into a growing rebellion, Maevis is forced to break out of her gilded cage.”

I would prefer you to be 18+ since some topics in the novel are one the darker side (think emotional/physical/sexual abuse, death, child loss) etc.

And I would LOVE if you’re able to start rather fast since I’ve already lost some time with other readers who don’t reply anymore. If you start this and for whatever reason decide to or cannot finish, just letting me know.

DM me if you’re interested. I’m happy to provide the first few chapters at first before you commit fully.


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

50k [Complete][51,502][Fantasy] The Last Hybrids: The Prime Gauntlet

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When students start turning up dead at Metropolis Academy, nineteen-year-old Zack Argent starts investigating. The trail leads to Tyler Knox, a bullied non-bender who has stumbled upon an ancient weapon of terrifying power — and the soul of history's most dangerous killer waiting inside it.

Zack and his best friend Rirek must stop a resurrection nearly a thousand years in the making before their city becomes a graveyard.

The Last Hybrids: The Prime Gauntlet is Book 1 of a planned five-book fantasy series. I've been working on this story for years, and Book 1 now has a completed draft. I'm looking for beta readers to give me an outside perspective on the opening three chapters before I move further with revisions and publishing plans.

Details:

  • Book 1 is complete.
  • Initial reading request: first three chapters, approximately 10,250 words.
  • Genre: Fantasy.

What I'm looking for: Honest reactions to the opening. Did the story grab your attention? Which characters stood out to you? How did the pacing feel? Were there any confusing moments? What did you enjoy, and what could be improved? Most importantly, after Chapter 3, would you want to read Chapter 4?

I have an anonymous questionnaire for anyone who prefers structured feedback, but honest gut reactions are just as welcome.

Timeline: Ideally 2–3 weeks for the opening chapters, but I'm flexible.

Happy to swap.

If you're interested, please comment or DM me, and I'll share the view-only document privately. Thanks!


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

90k [Complete][96k][Literary Coming of Age Fiction] Summers Gone By

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Every summer from 1992 to 1996, the same families return to Blue Woods, a small coastal vacation community with a dock, a treehouse and their rituals that feel like they'll last forever. Leah, now 41, looks back on those five summers with Matthew and Jacob: the mixtapes, the sand dollars, the games that get a little smaller (as they get a little bigger) each year.
As the world around them changes, the summers, like all things, begin to end, and so does childhood itself. Some changes they see coming. Others they never see at all.

Told in Leah's adult voice, woven through with scenes from each summer, Summers Gone By is about growing up, the things we take that aren't ours, and how a single moment can split an entire life into before and after.

Details:
Prologue, 14 chapters, 7 interludes, epilogue
Content warnings: drowning, death of young people, grief, bullying, abuse, alcoholism
What I'm looking for: Big-picture reactions. Where you got bored or confused, which characters you cared about, and whether the ending lands or not. I have a questionnaire if anybody would like that kind of structure, but honest gut reactions are just as welcome truly.
Timeline: about 4–6 weeks, happy to share chapter by chapter or whatever works best for you.
Happy to swap
Comment or DM me if you're interested. Thanks!


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

Novelette [In Progress] [8k] [Paranormal Fantasy] LOBOS DE ACERO: El alfa que no recuerda

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Hi everyone! I'm a new author looking for a few Spanish-speaking readers to take a quick look at my first novel, LOBOS DE ACERO: El alfa que no recuerda.

It's a paranormal fantasy featuring werewolves, military mystery, and slow-burn romance.

I've published the prologue and first two chapters (approximately 8,000 words), and I'd love some honest first impressions!

I'm mainly wondering: Does the opening grab your attention? Are the characters interesting? Would you keep reading?

Please DM me if you're interested, and I'll share the story link privately.

Thank you! 🐺❤️


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

Novelette [In Progress] [10k] [Queer YA Fantasy] The Queen of Thaletiah

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Please comment or message me directly if you'd like access to the form!

Story Blurb:

Sythia has spent ten years away from the only homeland she's ever known, wandering the world with little more than a horse, a pigeon, and the burdens of a past she'd rather leave behind.

But when word reaches her that the Blossom Queen of Thaletiah is holding a competition to find a partner in royal duty, Sythia knows she cannot stay away any longer. With a hundred kilometres separating her from home and the woman she once loved, she sets out on a journey that could change everything.

Her destination is Thaletiah. Her goal is to win the heart of its queen. Her greatest uncertainty is whether thee queen even remembers her.

For Avelani is no longer the young woman Sythia left behind. She is a queen, with a kingdom to lead and a future to build. And when the two women finally meet again, Sythia must face the possibility that the love she has carried across a decade may exist only in her memories.

Looking for critique on pace, story beats, and how to better the structure of my book.

I'm having issues with my computer, so I may look at your feedback every few days. If you were to leave a critique on my work, I'd love for you to message me, so I know to check the document.


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

90k [Complete][96K][Literary Fiction Coming of Age][Summers Gone By]

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Every summer from 1992 to 1996, the same families return to Blue Woods, a small coastal vacation community with a dock, a treehouse and their rituals that feel like they'll last forever. Leah, now 41, looks back on those five summers with Matthew and Jacob: the mixtapes, the sand dollars, the games that get a little smaller (as they get a little bigger) each year.
As the world around them changes, the summers, like all things, begin to end, and so does childhood itself. Some changes they see coming. Others they never see at all.
Told in Leah's adult voice, woven through with scenes from each summer, Summers Gone By is about growing up, the things we take that aren't ours, and how one moment can split a life into before and after.

Details:
Literary coming-of-age, about 96,000 words
Prologue, 14 chapters, 7 interludes, epilogue
Content warnings: drowning, death of young people, grief, bullying
What I'm looking for: Big-picture reactions. Where you got bored or confused, which characters you cared about, whether the ending lands. I have a questionnaire if you like structure, but honest gut reactions are just as welcome.
Timeline: [about 4–6 weeks, happy to share chapter by chapter]
Swap: [Happy to swap / Not swapping right now]
Comment or DM me if you're interested. Thanks!


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

Short Story [In Progress] [2,880K] [Contemporary Romance] Inherited Shadows, Ch. 1, 2: a grumpy ex-Army captain, a small-town bar, and a very bad first meeting

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Editing the body since I can't edit the title, word count is 2880 without 'K' - apologies, I'm new to Reddit :)

Hi guys. I would really appreciate a brutally honest assessment of my first two chapters. Can you help me?

It’s a contemporary romance with a dual POV: a former Army captain who owns a small-town bar with his injured best friend, and a woman whose path leads straight to him. Chapter 1 is his POV and Chapter 2 is hers.

What I’d most like to know:

  • Does Chapter 1 hook you? Where did you want to keep reading, and where did you start to lose interest?
  • Do the two POV voices feel distinct from each other?
  • Does Chapter 2 keep the momentum?

Content notes: mild profanity, and a physical altercation played for humor.

English is my second language, so please flag anything that sounds awkward or unnatural.

Please DM me and I’ll send you the Google Doc link

I'm happy to swap chapters if you would like feedback too! :)


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

Discussion [Discussion] soi didn't have beta for my first novel of the series

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I wrote my first series and my beta were friends and 2 random people who i became close with. I'm going straight for ARC with the first one [90k] words the second is also ready [100k] the series is long so what should i do? I can't have betas for book 2 who haven't read book1


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

50k [complete] [56k] [drama/romance] What You gave me

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Here is a super super rough draft of the blurb (I am rlly bad at writing them so I will probably hire someone):

Molly’s life was perfectly planned out, school, uni, dating, career, husband, baby… but two years post a devastating car accident she is unfulfilled, her family either dead or estranged, and unable to reimagine her life now that she is an incomplete paraplegic. In a panicked moment she calls a sexworker.

Jackson is a nineteen year old having sex with people to feed himself and fill a deep void rather than because it’s what he wants. He has a terrible roommate and a family who abandoned him. With an undiagnosed learning disability he struggles to find a way out.

Jackson and Molly have a strained first interaction that turns into a deep codependent friends with benefits arrangement, together they work on their family issues, education, self depreciation, and work hard to build each other up.

Some trigger warnings:

- F slur

- R slur

- Sex scenes

- Self harm

- Depression

- Disability (wheelchair user)

- Sex work

- Drugs and alcohol

- Body dysmorphia

I'm a bit stuck on any major changes that need to be made. It has not had line or copy editing yet. There are likely typos and repetitive language (which you are more than welcome to point out) but it will go through more editing for that. 

My instagram: levithomas.writing


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

80k [Complete] [80K] [YA/Adventure/Survival] The Hand on the Wall

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[Discussion] Visiting the awesome prehistoric caves in France earlier this year inspired me to write a novel about them. I'm looking for a few advance copy readers. If you're interested, please DM me. Book description below.

SHE'S FROM TWO WORLDS. SHE CAN ONLY LIVE IN ONE.

​Fifteen-year-old Anna thinks she’s just exploring a cave in France — until she touches a prehistoric handprint and wakes up fifteen thousand years in the past. Stranded among hunters who seem to recognize her, she learns the truth: she was born here.

When the wall opens again, Anna must make an impossible choice. Go back to her own time. Or stay with the Ice Age family she never knew she had. She can’t have both.


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

80k [Complete] [80k] [Fantasy] Stained Silver

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The novel is about a young man who is afflicted by a curse that outlaws him, and gives him a mark that is impossible to hide. His goal is to find somewhere safe to live, while he desperately longs for his home and to return to the life he had before. All while a inhumanly strong man is searching for people with the curse, because he wants to prevent a prophecy from happening.

If someone would please beta read this, that would be awesome.


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

Novella [Complete] [19k] [Memoir] Looking for a French reader for my memoir

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Hello, my name is Sabahat Komonaj. I wrote a memoir called "When All I Had Left Was Faith." It is my true story about faith, healing, and prayer. When I was a young mother of five, paralysis struck my body, and God healed me — I learned to walk again.

I have a French draft of the book (about 19,000 words). I need a native French reader to check that it reads naturally in French. This is free — I only ask for your honest help. Please send me a message if you can help.

Thank you, and God bless you. — Sabi —Excerpt from Chapter 1:

Il y a des moments où l'on n'a plus aucune force. On ne sait pas si son corps va se rétablir ni comment on va prendre soin de ses enfants. C'est là que la suite de mon histoire a commencé.

Parfois, les gens pensent que la foi vient quand tout va bien. Pour moi, la foi est venue quand il ne me restait presque plus rien.


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

>100k [Complete] [101k] [Dark Gothic Romance] The Serpent's Omen: a Salem tarot reader, a Boston crime family, and a serpent sworn to guard her

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Looking for 3 to 5 beta readers who love dark romance.

Blurb

Cassia Rhys doesn't believe in fate. She just sells it, reading tarot for tourists in Salem and taking a little white pill every night to keep one dream away: stone stairs, black water, a faceless man coming for her. The night she forgets the pill, a touch from her favorite Thursday customer sends a warning out of her in a voice that isn't hers. Don't take the river road. His driver dies there. The quiet old man runs the Draghetti crime family, and his son Evander wants to know what she is.

About the book: dark Gothic romance, Book One of a series, about 101,000 words. Dual first person (Cas and Evander), slow burn that turns explicit. Ends on a cliffhanger. Comps: Haunting Adeline, Two Twisted Crowns, Rebecca, Crimson Peak.

Excerpt (opening of Chapter One)

Something warm slides over my lip.

I touch it, and my fingertips come away dark in the gray light. Blood. It's on the pillowcase, a bloom the size of my fist. Copper and salt.

I have never had a nosebleed in my life.

I sit up too fast, and the room tilts. There's a pressure behind my eyes, like a thumb pushing from the inside. Migraine, I tell myself. The radiator has clanked all week. People get nosebleeds. It doesn't mean anything.

On the nightstand, the little orange bottle sits exactly where I left it. Cap on. I closed the shop last night, walked home in the rain, and fell into bed with my boots still on.

I don't like sleep. I don't like what waits for me inside it.

These days I swallow a little white pill before bed so there's nothing to tell. The only nights it fails me are the nights I forget it. Those are the nights the Dream gets in, and it's always the same one. Bay leaves. Cold salt air, though there's no sea anywhere in it. A woman singing low and a little off-key. A trembling hand closing my fingers around a leaf. Don't let him find you. Stone stairs going down into a dark that breathes, and a man at the bottom with no face, climbing, calling my name.

I always wake before he reaches me. That's the rule.

Last night he broke it. He took my wrist, and his fingers closed like a lock, and on his smallest finger there was a plain gold ring, heavy and old, catching a light that wasn't there.

Content warnings: murder, gun violence and blood; kidnapping and captivity; stalking and an obsessive love interest; organized crime; loss of a parent and foster care; a stroke and grief; seizures and nosebleeds; reliance on sleep medication; explicit sexual content.

Feedback I'd love: where you couldn't put it down, where you drifted, whether the romance and the danger land, and whether Evander works for you. Questions are built into the file; answer as much or as little as you like.

Timeline: about 5 weeks. Word file or Kindle file, your choice. Feedback in chunks is welcome.

Critique swap: happy to swap with anyone writing romance, romantasy, Gothic or dark fiction.

Comment or DM me and tell me a dark romance you loved recently!


r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

Short Story [Complete] [3.9K] [Reflective Literary Nonfiction] Me Unscripted — What If a Book Didn't Tell You Who to Become?

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r/BetaReaders • • 1d ago

70k [Complete] [73K] [YA Mystery] The Pyrite Sisters

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Hey all, looking for a few beta readers for my 73k YA mystery novel. Think National Treasure but with Wednesday Addams and Veronica Mars as sisters doing the investigation. 

Millicent is a socially awkward but brilliant fifteen-year-old with a knack for forensics. Her sixteen-year-old sister Valeria lives life seeking rules in need of breaking and people in need of interrogating. Raised by their FBI agent father, the girls are brilliant detectives, and horrendous siblings.

But when a mysterious riddle buried by the town’s founder shortly before his suspicious death nearly two centuries ago is unearthed  beneath their school, the sisters set aside their differences for answers. Combining their opposing skillsets, the girls begin to unravel a puzzle that leads them through hidden clues, a forgotten town history, and a decades-old conspiracy someone seems all too willing to kill to protect.

The novel is told in alternating chapters from each sister’s perspective and combines puzzle-solving, dry humor, sibling banter, and a character-driven mystery with light historical elements.

Looking for input on the narratives, propulsion, pacing and overall character appeal, particularly in the first third of the manuscript. If this sounds like something you would be into, hit me up!

Thanks.